Talk:Planar Shift (740)

Alright . . . this is my first contribution. I realize from talking to KDLMAJERE that its an absolute mess, but I'm totally willing to change anything and everything thats wrong with it. Basically, I was asked to put this up, and the whole process went from simple request to incredibly complicated task beyond what I expected. So this one is how I learn I guess. I have no idea whatsoever about any kind of editing etiquette there is, so Ulthripe, I hope taking those lines out of what you had up before isn't a problem, obviously, it can be reversed (I didn't even know about the discussion page until after I had changed it). Basically, if what KDLMAJERE has to say about the whole thing is correct, then I will be seeing lots of changes to this. Just let me know what I did wrong.

I dont think you've done anything 'wrong' here, your information is concise and pertinant. I dont know if I would have this much information on the spell's main page, though. Try looking at some of the other spell pages to get an idea of how much or how little information should be there. I would personally consider your explanation thorough, yet wordy. This particular page I left it very bare bones intentionally, since the spell doesnt even exist yet, none of these 'facts' are even concrete. I hope one of the sysops will make a comment here as to how appropriate your additions are. ULTHRIPE 01:02, 11 January 2006 (CST)

Just did a quick copyedit. In general, the article was fine. A bit of unneeded rhetoric here and there, but that's bound to happen. You should take a look at the style guide we have and read through it and the tips and tricks section linked from there to get a feel for some stuff. One general comment I have is the slight over use of sub sections. Having two subsections back-to-back with no text in between is unnecessary. Also, the first paragraph shouldn't have a section devoted to it, it should just sit at the top of the article. Generally, if you've hit ==== with subsections, you might have gone too far.  ;) Otherwise, the content was fine for a spell still in development. Anshou 12:20, 11 January 2006 (CST)

Alright, somewhat suprised to see all the suggestions were fixed already, so thanks for that. I went back in and rephrased just a few things, and added a lot of links. I think I am getting the hang of it to an extent. I think I see what you mean about the subsections. I had been thinking more of an format where the lowest subsections contained all of the information, and that the higher up subsections were just for organization. I will refrain from that in the future, for sure. Being that this is the 740 Talk page, I probably shouldn't be discussing all these more personal thing, so is there a more general area for discussion of these sorts of things? On that last note, what is the CST stand for at the end of your posts? Being that it is after a time, I can only assume Central Standard Time, but who knows. I don't want to throw that in there without knowing what it is. IRVINETOMOE 12:01, 12 January 2006